My Feedback From Ms Morris

Reiss- Group work/discussion

well done, you clearly listen to the ideas of others and make relevant contributions to the meetings.

P

Target- listen to the details of the ideas being discussed and build on the ideas of others. you are working with some imaginative people but i am sure you can help make their ideas even better!





Reiss- Treatment

Good work, you have described the key events that will happen in your pilot show. well done for mentioning the fact the camera interviews the characters, you have linked in the mockumentary conventions.

M-

Target- explain why things happen




Reiss- good work, you have used the appropriate conventions needed for a script

M-

target- Make sure the script includes information about the interview scene.

Differences Between Dockumentaries & Mockumentarys

The device I am going to discuss is shot types and variety. In the documentary the tribe I see close up shots to see every little detail of an insect, this makes the audience think the programme is for us to take it more details about insects so we learn more this shows us that not everyone knows every little detail of an insect this would appeal to adults who want to find out about new things.

 

In the mockumentary we see the device long shot and full body shot types for example from head to toes we see this when the camera changes the viewing from one side to the other of the room so we can see every bit of detail of their body language the summer heights high boys get up to at break within their school hours as an audience we feel delighted to watch it because some teenagers do things like that at school and find it funny for others to watch

 

 

 

Quality of footage is different, look believable to look HD more specific and how people are willing to pay a lot. Such has in the mockumentary ‘the heights high’ there’s a which isn’t planned so the audience find it funny, the mockumentary uses a standard camera,  because it looks like a normal TV show it looks more unplanned and believable.

 

The mockumentary uses the interviewer’s style because when ‘the heights high’ talk into the camera’s they don’t answer any questions they just talk to make us feel welcomed about telling us all their stories and secrets.

The documentary uses the narrator style because in ‘the tribe’ there’s a voice over which gives us extra information about what were meant to be looking at. In the mockumentary Jonas uses slang for example “FOBS means fresh off the boat”, for the audience we know this programme/comedy is set up for teenagers within their school life. They include erm yeah okay to make the show look unplanned

However the documentary uses specific vocabulary such has “Before they can get any honey, they have to pacify the bees with smoke”,

Survey Results

Proposal

Proposal

Company Name: ROLL the camera

Contact details: HAB Southwark Park Road, Bermondsey SE16 3TZ

Title of Show: The most noble borough of Berms.

Type of Show: Mockumentary

Purpose of the Show: To entertain and mock documentaries. Making fun of Bermondsey and Bermondsey life. Stereotypes are exaggerated.

Synopsis: The show follows the lives of different people in Bermondsey; it highlights the strong difference between the ‘posh side’ and the ‘rough/chavvy side’ of the borough. One section follows a gang of ‘rude-girls’ (Vixen, Vassy and Violin) and a group of ‘rough boys’ (Buster, Box and Basher) as they cause havoc on their estate. Once in a while these two gangs come across the DKNY gang (Diana, Kathleen, Noreen Elizabeth Victoria Francesca Mary Anne Catherine Jill the 7^th and Yolanda). LIFE SWAP features two very opposite families; The Collingswood’s (who love the Royal Family) and the John. The Collingswood family consists of Joanne (Mother), Sebastian (Father) and Leonardo (15). The John family consists of Aduke (Mother), Timothy Bob (Father), Khadijat (18 months), Dominic (4), Tobi (9), Leanne (13) and Timothy Junior (16). They will take part in activities that ‘the other side’ enjoy (e.g. Tea and Scones and Wild Parties). The Parenting section will have a few random men and women (we do not get to know the characters). Ethel and Joseph Campbell host the ‘Bermondsey Language Lessons’ (they’re about 80).

Target Audience: Targeted at youths, students and young adults as it is a mock of their life.

Final Script

 

Act One, Scene One.

FADE IN.
EXT.CHILDRENS ESTATE. LATE MORNING/EARLY AFTERNOON.

The group of rude girls VIXEN, VASSY and VIOLIN are all bunking a day off their school Harris Academy Bermondsey and taking a trip down to the local children’s park. The day has been so far sunny but starting to get chilly has the day passes and gets later into the night. The girls haven’t really got anything good to do so it felt like a normal boring school day but chilling in the park, on the bench eating a packet of crisp taking several sips on a bottle of Dr Pepper.

VIXEN (Jokey tone)

“Out of Box, Basher & Buster which one does you prefer the best?”

 

VASSY (Posh but sarcastic tone and pulls a funny face)

“Well Well *laughs* I don’t like any of them though do I?

 

VIOLIN (Serious tone)

Oh C’mon girls don’t be shy (moving eyebrows) it’s normal to like a boy; I’ll tell you who I like and who I iz liking now. (Blushing)

 

VIXEN (shy covers face)

Well girls I actually have a really big secret to tell ya’s, I’ve already been out with one of the boys. 

2 EXT LEAVING CHILDRENS PLAYGROUND LATE AFTERNOON.

LATE SPRING

BASHER BOX & BUSTER walk past the park and the girls and the girls spot the boys then quickly skip up to walk out the park acting like they haven’t seen the boys.

VIOLIN (sweating & shouting)

“Phewww! His well hot like oh my days I will so go out with him”

VASSY & VIXEN (looking at each other and starts to giggle)

“Oh VIOLIN give it a rest please hunnay.”

The boys hear VIOLIN then just turn to each other have a slight grin the start laughing

Re Draft

Final Treatment.

 

Act 1: Vixen, Vassy & Violin go to the park in daytime at 12:15pm on Monday the 14^th of October 2012 on a sunny but windy day and they’re sitting on the bench eating a packet of crisps, then the camera crew runs up to them and interview them when they are just about to leave the park. The situation of it is Vixen Vassy & Violin have chosen to bunk a day off school but still meet up for a daytime discussion based on their life at school and the teachers they dislike alongside the boys they fancy.

Act 2: Vixen then leaves Vassy & Violin and ends up getting a text off Basher to meet him. Basher and Vixen then meet up outside Co-Operative they say hello and ask how each other are, whilst Basher and Vixen are sitting on the wall Vassy & Violin ring Vixen’s phone to see if she got home safe. At this point Vassy and Violin heard Bashers mate Box shout out “BASSHHERR” Vixen then automatically cuts off the phone call with Vassy & Violin.

 

Act 3: Vixen walks to school Tuesday the 15^th of October 2012 by herself as Vassy & Violin are acting off with Vixen. Basher then spots Vixen in school and walks over to say hello and thanks for meeting him yesterday Vixen is being a bit stupid and blanks Basher and walks straight into her next lesson. The whole school is now at break and Vixen feels bad about leaving her two best friend’s out for Basher

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Act 1: vixen, vassy & violin go to the park and they’re sitting on the bench then the camera crew runs up to them and interview them.

Act 2: vixen then meets basher and fancies each other and vassy & violin don’t lie basher because they are jealous vixen doesn’t like them.

Act 3: vixen doesn’t want to pick a boy over her best 2 friends so she dumps basher.

 

 

Who: Vixen, Vassy, violin, basher

What:

Where: the park

When:

How:

Why?